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Your essay was much too short. High scoring SAT essays are typically 350 to 400 words or more in length.
Don’t say that you are offering your opinion—just offer it.
Your sentences are generally too long, which may make your ideas difficult to follow. Consider breaking up longer sentences.
Your essay would probably receive a higher grade if the organization of your ideas were more apparent from sentence to sentence and from paragraph to paragraph. Give your SAT readers more “signposts” to help them follow your arguments.
Your ideas might be clearer if you used more commas (or other punctuation marks) to separate clauses within your sentences.
Your essay would be easier to read if you divided your ideas more into separate paragraphs. High-scoring SAT essays usually have between 4 and 6 paragraphs, with an average of 5.
Fancy (SAT-type) words impress human graders, so you should try to include a few throughout your essay.
Once you've read the score report - you will undoubtedly think of at least a few things that you could improve in your essay.
As you can see, we have revised the essay, following the suggestions from the comments. Read through the essay again to see how we have improved it, then click "Reevaluate Essay" to see the revised score report.